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Message de keub posté le 19-03-2006 à 20:41:24 (S | E | F | I)
Bonjour tout le monde, dans le cadre d'un devoir nous devions imaginer un réfrigérateur futuriste et en faire une description en anglais. J'aimerais avoir votre avis sur les éventuelles fautes que j'aurais faites, merci d'avance :
We will be present a new system of refrigerator. It’s a revolutionary system, his name is Vasilisaïkeub.
It’s composed of two parts:
- The first part is in the house and is used as interface with the user. It’s the “housegate”
- The second part is has the exterior of the house and is useful for the deliveries. It’s the “stargate”
The housegate is very convivial and is conceived to make it possible to answer least of waiting of the user. The person can follow all these operations on a tactile screen LCD of 27 inches. This part allows much more than one normal refrigerator, indeed it cooks you directly your favourites dishes. Does the withdrawal period seem to you too long? The system has a distributor of barbapapa. The VSK can also treat your remote requests: you can plan your dishes with your telephone portable with a simple SMS or send an e-mail or simply program your schedules on the diary of the VSK. The VSK has a connection WIFI, ports USB, a catch universal adaptable to any type of machines... when you return will not have any more but to install you with your table without you to trouble to cook! You can also make your shopping with a software of management of the best prices and promotions at largest food distributor in the world. The payment can be done by credit card with to a card reader compatible with all the cards. We can same pay by credit transfer or there is also the possibility of charging a personal account to be able to pay the deliveryman … A phone is even integrated into the housegate. A reader DVD DivX MP5 is installed.
The stargate is used for the deliveries: the deliveryman gives your purchases in a trunk has the back of the VSK. The delivery is express, our service begins has to deliver to you everywhere in the world in less than 2 minutes 31 seconds. Then the deliveryman can be to pay with the account. The stargate makes it possible to feed in energy the VSK: solar panels are installed on its surface. There is a second feeding system functioning with electricity like a conventional refrigerator.
The interior of the VSK makes up of a microonde high technology to cook, a hook to seize the food, compartments for each type of products. There is a scanner which is based on the system of carbon-14. The VSK is able to know which product is not good any more and to destroy it if need be. The temperature is managed according to the place where one is in the VSK: in top the weather is hotter than bottom.
A VSK costs only 100 € what makes of it surely the best refrigerator of the market.
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Modifié par whynot95 le 19-03-2006 20:46
divers fautes / titre + texte.
Message de keub posté le 19-03-2006 à 20:41:24 (S | E | F | I)
Bonjour tout le monde, dans le cadre d'un devoir nous devions imaginer un réfrigérateur futuriste et en faire une description en anglais. J'aimerais avoir votre avis sur les éventuelles fautes que j'aurais faites, merci d'avance :
We will be present a new system of refrigerator. It’s a revolutionary system, his name is Vasilisaïkeub.
It’s composed of two parts:
- The first part is in the house and is used as interface with the user. It’s the “housegate”
- The second part is has the exterior of the house and is useful for the deliveries. It’s the “stargate”
The housegate is very convivial and is conceived to make it possible to answer least of waiting of the user. The person can follow all these operations on a tactile screen LCD of 27 inches. This part allows much more than one normal refrigerator, indeed it cooks you directly your favourites dishes. Does the withdrawal period seem to you too long? The system has a distributor of barbapapa. The VSK can also treat your remote requests: you can plan your dishes with your telephone portable with a simple SMS or send an e-mail or simply program your schedules on the diary of the VSK. The VSK has a connection WIFI, ports USB, a catch universal adaptable to any type of machines... when you return will not have any more but to install you with your table without you to trouble to cook! You can also make your shopping with a software of management of the best prices and promotions at largest food distributor in the world. The payment can be done by credit card with to a card reader compatible with all the cards. We can same pay by credit transfer or there is also the possibility of charging a personal account to be able to pay the deliveryman … A phone is even integrated into the housegate. A reader DVD DivX MP5 is installed.
The stargate is used for the deliveries: the deliveryman gives your purchases in a trunk has the back of the VSK. The delivery is express, our service begins has to deliver to you everywhere in the world in less than 2 minutes 31 seconds. Then the deliveryman can be to pay with the account. The stargate makes it possible to feed in energy the VSK: solar panels are installed on its surface. There is a second feeding system functioning with electricity like a conventional refrigerator.
The interior of the VSK makes up of a microonde high technology to cook, a hook to seize the food, compartments for each type of products. There is a scanner which is based on the system of carbon-14. The VSK is able to know which product is not good any more and to destroy it if need be. The temperature is managed according to the place where one is in the VSK: in top the weather is hotter than bottom.
A VSK costs only 100 € what makes of it surely the best refrigerator of the market.
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Modifié par whynot95 le 19-03-2006 20:46
divers fautes / titre + texte.
Réponse: Réfrigérateur de jean31, postée le 22-03-2006 à 14:59:15 (S | E)
Bonjour keub,
Mes propositions sont signalées en majuscules, as usual.
(0) signale un mot superflu supprimé.
signale mon incompréhension de ce qui précède....//... ITS name is Vasilisaïkeub.
... and is used as AN interface with the user.
- The second ONE is OUTSIDE the house and is useful/handy for (0) deliveries.
... and is conceived to make the user'S WAITING AS SHORT AS POSSIBLE. (ai-je bien deviné ?)
... all these operations on a 27 inches LCD TOUCH-SENSITIVE screen. This part allows much more than A normal refrigerator SINCE it cooks your favouritE(0) dishes. Does the withdrawal
period seem too long to you ? The system has a CANDY-FLOSS DISPENSER....You can plan your dishes FROM A PORTABLE telephone with a simple SMS, send an e-mail or programME your schedules on the VSK DIAL.(le cadran, je suppose) The VSK has a WiFi connection, USB ports, a universal PLUG FOR any type of machines...
When you GET BACK HOME, you WILL JUST have to sit AT your table AND ENJOY YOUR ALREADY COOKED MEAL ! You can also Do your shopping USING a management software of the best prices and SPECIAL OFFERS FROM the largest food COMPANIES in the world. (0) Payment can be done by credit card USING ITS UNIVERSAL card reader. YOU can ALSO pay by credit transfer or CREDIT a personal account SO AS TO be able to pay the delivery man. (en 2 mots) A BUILT-IN phone is even FITTED IN the housegate. A DVD DivX MP5 reader is installed.
The stargate is used for (0) deliveries : the delivery man PUTS your purchases in a trunk AT the back of the VSK. (0) Delivery is express (0) everywhere in the world in less than 2 minutes 31 seconds. Then the delivery man can be paid FROM the account. The stargate feeds the VSK WITH energy FROM solar panels WHICH are FITTED on its surface. ...//...
The interior of the VSK is FITTED WITH a high technology MICROWAVE OVEN to cook, an INSULATED hook to CATCH (0) food, compartments for each type of products. There is a scanner which is based on the carbon-14 system.
...//...
...: in THE top PART the ATMOSPHERE is hotter than in THE bottom ONE.
A VSK costs only 100 €, WHICH UNDOUBTEDLY makes it the best VALUE FOR MONEY refrigerator.
A postériori, je m'aperçois que ton travail est de qualité très inégale. Parfois de véritables énormités, parfois de bonnes choses. A tel point que je me demande si c'est bien la même personne qui a tout rédigé.
Good luck anyway.
INDISPENSABLES : 