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Calvin (correction)
Message de sonibrit posté le 15-10-2005 à 23:12:00 (S | E | F | I)
Bonjour à tous notre professeur nous a donné un devoir maison et voici les consignes:
Imagine the contents of an anxious letter from Calvin to Santa or to God (you choose). Use expressions of apology, intention, and ask for a few favours .
Voilà ce que je propose:
Dear Santa,
I'm a little American boy. In my age I have a lot of imagination and ask for a lot of questions about you.
I would know if you're putting my name on the "BAD" list because I doubted your existence so I don't get any presents this year.
Some kid told me that you know if the children are good or bad.
It's probable that you know what I said. I supposed you don't make sense and if you don't exist, what's the meaning of all this.
While reflecting at home, I found all these questions are stupid.
Therefore, I regret what I told and please accept my apologies.
For that you forgive me I'm going to tell at everybody believing in SANTA CLAUS.
A last sentence then i will stop, Can you do me a favour?
Well, I would like to have a bicycle at Christmas but my parents think it's dangerous for a little boy like me,...Can you bring me for my presents if it's possible?
by A GOOD BOY
Message de sonibrit posté le 15-10-2005 à 23:12:00 (S | E | F | I)
Bonjour à tous notre professeur nous a donné un devoir maison et voici les consignes:
Imagine the contents of an anxious letter from Calvin to Santa or to God (you choose). Use expressions of apology, intention, and ask for a few favours .
Voilà ce que je propose:
Dear Santa,
I'm a little American boy. In my age I have a lot of imagination and ask for a lot of questions about you.
I would know if you're putting my name on the "BAD" list because I doubted your existence so I don't get any presents this year.
Some kid told me that you know if the children are good or bad.
It's probable that you know what I said. I supposed you don't make sense and if you don't exist, what's the meaning of all this.
While reflecting at home, I found all these questions are stupid.
Therefore, I regret what I told and please accept my apologies.
For that you forgive me I'm going to tell at everybody believing in SANTA CLAUS.
A last sentence then i will stop, Can you do me a favour?
Well, I would like to have a bicycle at Christmas but my parents think it's dangerous for a little boy like me,...Can you bring me for my presents if it's possible?
by A GOOD BOY
Réponse: Calvin (correction) de sonibrit, postée le 16-10-2005 à 12:31:30 (S | E)
S'il vous plaît j'attends la correction c'est très urgent
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Edité par bridg le 16-10-2005 12:53
Réponse: Calvin (correction) de lucile83, postée le 16-10-2005 à 15:12:43 (S | E)
Hello,
Ce n'est pas la peine d'envoyer des mp tous azimuts alors que tu as posté sur le forum ! bien sûr je suppose que c'est pour demain matin !
Voici ton texte avec des annotations, je n'ai pas corrigé mais indiqué là où tu dois réfléchir et remanier ta phrase; à toi de jouer maintenant
See you soon
Dear Santa,
I'm a little American boy. ….. my age I have a lot of imagination and ask …….. a lot of questions about you.
I would ……… …….. know if you're putting my name on the "BAD" list because I doubted your existence so I don't get any presents this year.
Some kid…..au pluriel…. told me that you know if the children are good or bad.
you…utilise un modal ici…. know what I said. I supposed you don't make sense and if you don't exist, what's the meaning of all this.
While reflecting at home, I found all these questions are stupid.
Therefore, I regret what I told and ….un seul verbe ici………….
For that you forgive me I'm going to tell at….to tell somebody, corrige……. everybody believing in SANTA CLAUS.
A last sentence then i…….c’est quoi cette lettre en minuscule???????……… will stop, Can you do me a favour?
Well, I would like to have a bicycle at Christmas but my parents think it's dangerous for a little boy like me,...Can you bring me for my presents if it's possible?
Réponse: Calvin (correction) de jier, postée le 16-10-2005 à 15:29:13 (S | E)
Bonjour Sonibrit,
Voici ce que je te propose :
Dear Santa,
I am a little American Boy. At my age I have a lot of imagination and keep asking myself a lot of questions about you.
I would like to know whether you put my name down on the « Bad » list because I doubted your existence so that I don’t get any presents this year.
Some kids told me that you know if children are good or bad. You probably know what I said. I suppose you don’t make sense and if you don’t exist, I wonder what the meaning of all this is.
While reflecting at home, I found all these questions are silly. Therefore I wish I hadn’t said them and beg you please accept my apologies.
In order that you should forgive me, I’m going to tell (0) everybody I believe in Santa Claus.
Finally, would you do me a favour ?
Well, I would like to have a bicycle at Christmas but my parents think it’s dangerous for a little boy like me. Can you bring me one as a present if possible ?
Thank you very much.
A GOOD boy.
NB : Ton anglais est bon la plupart du temps. Je n’ai fait que de légères retouches balisées.
Good luck.
INDISPENSABLES : 