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Message de mal850 posté le 10-01-2018 à 14:59:20 (S | E | F)
je dois faire un travail sur une personne qui a dépassé ses limites et présenter quelques moments de sa vie , je voudrais juste savoir si l'expression et l'orthographe Sont correct esbien .Merci d'avance
Neil Armstrong is considered as a american hero because he is the first human who to walk on Moon. He was born on August the 5 in 1930 in Wapakoneta in Ohio .Before to be astronaut , in 1945 he was determined to obtain his flying license.In 1951 he participed in the korea wars where he did 78 missions over Korea for a total of 121 flying hours and he received many rewards such as the Gold star .This man was remarkable and bold ,he got engineering degree in 1955 he didn’t stop there and to futfill his objectives , the same year he decided to join the Nasa where he ovecame many obastacles who permited him to have many record such as to be the first American civilian in space and the first to successful docking of two vehicles in space during the Gemini 8 mission .During Apollo 11 mission , to train he took a LLRV but the LLRV exploded and he managed to go out of the device at the last second.Armstrong have been courageous to take that risk on Earth.Apollo 11 was going to be hard but he didn’t give up and he went beyond his limits by taking up the challenge of the humanity to go and walk on Moon in 1969 and he managed to pilot the Lunar Module to the moon's surface and over there he pronounced his famous sentence « That ‘s one small step for a man but one giant leap for mankind».Neil Armstong became a world hero and he was decorated by 17 countries and he finished his career as teacher but he died in 2012.
Modifié par lucile83 le 10-01-2018 15:41
Réponse : Aide/beyond limits de gerondif, postée le 11-01-2018 à 16:31:10 (S | E)
je dois faire un travail sur une personne qui a dépassé ses limites et présenter quelques moments de sa vie , je voudrais juste savoir si l'expression et l'orthographe sont corrects .Merci d'avance
Bien, toutes vos phrases proviennent de la biographie wikipédia du personnage, que vous avez prises sur la version française , avec quelques phrases de lien à vous comme "il a été courageux de prendre ce risque sur terre", puis traduites en anglais, on retouve donc les maladresses dues à la traduction. Le même article existait en anglais juste en dessous.
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Neil Armstrong is considered as a (an devant un son voyelle)american(majuscule) hero because he is the first human(est un adjectif, rajoutez being) who to(structure incorrecte. à avoir marché se traduira par un infinitif passé) walk on the Moon. He was born on August the 5th
He accepted a teaching position in the Department of Aerospace Engineering at the University of Cincinnati, having decided on Cincinnati over other universities, including his alma mater, Purdue, because it had a small aerospace department; he hoped that the faculty members would not be annoyed that he came straight into a professorship with only the USC master's degree. He began the work while stationed at Edwards years before, and finally completed it after Apollo 11 by presenting a report on various aspects of Apollo, instead of a thesis on the simulation of hypersonic flight. The official job title he received at Cincinnati was University Professor of Aerospace Engineering. After teaching for eight years, he resigned in 1979 without explaining his reason for leaving.
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