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Message de olihand posté le 11-11-2007 à 16:28:55 (S | E | F | I)

Bonjour!
J'ai une rédaction d'anglais à faire, le sujet est :
How do you imagine your life when you are 25? Is there a job you would particularly like to do? why? Do you have a dream?
Alors j'ai rédigé mais je voudrais avoir un peu d'aide pour savoir si il y a des grosses fautes que j'aurais pu éviter... merci beaucoup


When I'm 25, I imagine I will be with my loved and wonderful man, expecting my first child ( I would like have 3 children). It might be a girl called Lou or Lilou. We'll live in a house in town, but I would like have a house in a country for the weekends. I will have a dog, a boxer, because it's very kind with children. I'll be able to play the guitar and the percussions very good. I would have learnt the piano, the accordion andthe violon. I am going to several languages: english, spanish and provençal.
I would have a job that enjoying me, like history or spanish professor 'cause I very like that subjects, and I want to make the pupils want to learnt it, like my fourth year of secondary school's profesor did. I would like to be older people or children assistant too: I like assist the ones who need help.
My dream would be to become a very very good handball player, but I have articular problems, and I don't know if I would be able to do sport for ever. Otherwise, I would enjoy travel in the world, and do humanitarian actions in Africa, to assist populations who need help.

Voila, c'est assez long, alors je comprendrais qu'on ne m'aide que pour une partie...^^ Merci

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Modifié par lucile83 le 11-11-2007 16:47
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Réponse: Rédaction de verduns_finest, postée le 12-11-2007 à 08:51:18 (S | E)
When I'm 25, I imagine I will be with my loved and wonderful man, expecting my first child ( I would like have 3 children). It might be a girl called Lou or Lilou. We'll live in a house in town, but I would like have a house in a country for the weekends. I will have a dog, a boxer, because it's very kind with children. I'll be able to play the guitar and the percussions very good.I would have learnt the piano, the accordion andthe violon.

When I'm 25 I imagine that I will be with my lover; a wonderful man expecting my first child (I would like to have three). (Should it be/If it were to be/If it is) a girl I will name her Lou or Lilou. We will live in a house in town although I would like to have one in the country for the weekends. I will have a dog, a boxer, because they are gentle with children. I will be able to play the guitar and the percussions very well. I will have learned the piano, the accordion and the violin as well.



I am going to several languages: english, spanish and provençal. I would have a job that enjoying me, like history or spanish professor 'cause I very like that subjects, and I want to make the pupils want to learnt it, like my fourth year of secondary school's profesor did. I would like to be older people or children assistant too: I like assist the ones who need help.


I going to learn several languages: English, Spanish and Provencal. I will have a job that I enjoy like a professor of History or Spanish because Ilike those subjects very much and I want others to want to learn them as well, like my secondary school professor did for me. I would also like to help the elderly or children; I like helping those in need.




My dream would be to become a very very good handball player, but I have articular problems, and I don't know if I would be able to do sport for ever. Otherwise, I would enjoy travel in the world, and do humanitarian actions in Africa, to assist populations who need help.


My dream would also be to become an excellent handball player but I have articular problems so I don't know if I would be able to play the sport. Otherwise, I would enjoy traveling the world and doing humanitarian work in Africa, to help the people who are in serious need of help.

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Modifié par lucile83 le 12-11-2007 09:29
Merci de noter que nous ne donnons pas les corrections toutes faites car cela n'aide en rien à progresser.


Réponse: Rédaction de olihand, postée le 12-11-2007 à 17:56:33 (S | E)
Merci beaucoup pour votre aide




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