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Message de alexandrounet posté le 19-03-2008 à 20:25:41 (S | E | F)
Bonjour tout le monde, voila j'ai un devoir d'anglais pour demain, je dois raconter une anecdote pendant laquelle j'ai désobéi à mes parents, et que je me suis faitavoir prendre :p alors j'aurais besoin de savoir si j'ai fait des fautes ? si oui lesquelles ? merci 
Have you ever disobeyed your parents and suffered the consequences ?
Yes, when I was a kid, I have disobeyed my parents.
I was about twelve years old, and my favourite occupation was to play with bangers.
But my parents did not like when I played with this.
Well, one day, i was gone at Nice with my best friend, and my purpose was to buy banger in a specialized shop.
And when I was enter, I have called the seller, and I have said to him that I want to buy some BIG banger.
And he said : "Hello, I have a really big banger, but I can't sell you it without your parents"
Well, I said " There is no problem mister, I call them and they will say to you that they are agree". I have taken my phone and I call my mother. In the past, I had say to my sister that she would to answer when I call, but she had forgotten and my mother talked with the seller and she said : "Oh my god my son in lonly at Nice, and he want to buy banger ! ? Give me him please . Alexandre, come back at home immediatly !"
Well I came back at home... and my mother had private me to play on my playstation two for two weeks...
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Modifié par bridg le 19-03-2008 20:43
Message de alexandrounet posté le 19-03-2008 à 20:25:41 (S | E | F)
Bonjour tout le monde, voila j'ai un devoir d'anglais pour demain, je dois raconter une anecdote pendant laquelle j'ai désobéi à mes parents, et que je me suis fait
Have you ever disobeyed your parents and suffered the consequences ?
Yes, when I was a kid, I have disobeyed my parents.
I was about twelve years old, and my favourite occupation was to play with bangers.
But my parents did not like when I played with this.
Well, one day, i was gone at Nice with my best friend, and my purpose was to buy banger in a specialized shop.
And when I was enter, I have called the seller, and I have said to him that I want to buy some BIG banger.
And he said : "Hello, I have a really big banger, but I can't sell you it without your parents"
Well, I said " There is no problem mister, I call them and they will say to you that they are agree". I have taken my phone and I call my mother. In the past, I had say to my sister that she would to answer when I call, but she had forgotten and my mother talked with the seller and she said : "Oh my god my son in lonly at Nice, and he want to buy banger ! ? Give me him please . Alexandre, come back at home immediatly !"
Well I came back at home... and my mother had private me to play on my playstation two for two weeks...
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Modifié par bridg le 19-03-2008 20:43
Réponse: anecdote /correction de alexandrounet, postée le 19-03-2008 à 20:52:27 (S | E)
Juste ces deux petites erreurs ? aucune autre ? je suis fier de moi :p
Réponse: anecdote /correction de alexandrounet, postée le 19-03-2008 à 20:54:01 (S | E)
Erf je suis desolé mais le temps j'avais un peu modifié mon texte, voilà ce que ca donne maintenant (si vous voyez des erreurs...
) :Have you ever disobeyed your parents and suffered the consequences ?
When I was younger I disobeyed my parents.
I was about twelve years old and my favourite occupation was to play with bangers.
My parents did not like it when I played with them because of the fact that I might get hurt.
One day I was going to Nice with my best friend, and my purpose was to buy bangers in a specialized shop.
When I entered the store I told the store manager to show me their largest banger.
He showed me a huge one and said; "I have a really big banger, but I can't sell it to you without your parents being present."
Well, I said that it's no problem sir, I'll call them and they'll tell you that I have their consent". I picked up my phone and called my "mother".
Before I left home I told my sister to answer the phone if it rang and to pretend to be my mother, so I phoned home and to my surprise my sister had forgot to answer the phone, instead it was my mother who answered.
She spoke with the store manager and said; "Oh my god my son is alone in Nice, and he wants to buy bangers!? Let me speak with him please. Alexandre, come back home immediatly!"
Well I went home and my mother was furious, she grounded me and forbid me to use my playstation for two weeks.
I deserved it and I learned a valuable lesson.
Réponse: anecdote /correction de violet91, postée le 19-03-2008 à 22:30:03 (S | E)
Voilà du bon travail..mais une fameuse bêtise ,en effet! Les parents sont toujours là où on ne les attend pas .deux fautes subsistent:--My sister had + P. Passé (forget)---my mother "grounded"= scolded .
P.S To grind, ground, ground : moudre. la conclusion est correcte: that taught me a lesson!
Si tous les lycéens étaient comme toi,quel repos ,ce serait !
je parle de la 2ème mouture !!
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Modifié par violet91 le 19-03-2008 22:31
