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My compositon of 'Equilibrium'
Message de bully5 posté le 17-12-2008 à 22:04:09 (S | E | F)
Hello,
Can you see my composing, please
What do you think??
1.
The movie is a fiction science.
In the street of Libria, feelings don't exist any more, they are erased by a drug: Proxium. This drug anti-anxiety returns the happier men. So means have accepted to put aside their freedom to live in accordance with the spiritual leader: "the father".John Preston is the main character, he works for "the father" and hunt all those who transgress. One day, Preston doesn't take his drug and afterward he get with transgressors. He is tracked down and must be killed as every transgressor but he is going to fight to kill the leader and so the feelings come back in the society.
2. Preston, main character, have not feeling thanks at his drug. His face fa hasn't expression: he doesn't smile, doesn't cry... But then, when he transgress his feelings reappear on the face. People who are under the same influence have too nobody feelings.
On the other hand those who break are obliged to hide to express them.
3.the title " Equilibrium " means the equilibre of the society. Indeed, when the men are all drug-addicts the society is totally stable, she lives in harmony and is controlled by a spiritual leader. It aims at stopping the wars, the destructions of mans.
4.The society want all mans haven't feeling because the men live in totally harmony, in peace. But they want a world without war. But some transgress, Preston and his team hunt and kill them: what drive in spite of them war!
I do not want to live in such a society because to haven’t feelings: it is to be inhuman: there are no feelings, no enjoyment, no punishment... All the individuals are indifferent some to the others: more shared love, more happiness... I’m not agree with a philosophy : people have no reason for living. The men are manipulated, their behaviours are as robots. In really, that is a danger!
Thank you J
Message de bully5 posté le 17-12-2008 à 22:04:09 (S | E | F)
Hello,
Can you see my composing, please
What do you think??
1.
The movie is a fiction science.
In the street of Libria, feelings don't exist any more, they are erased by a drug: Proxium. This drug anti-anxiety returns the happier men. So means have accepted to put aside their freedom to live in accordance with the spiritual leader: "the father".John Preston is the main character, he works for "the father" and hunt all those who transgress. One day, Preston doesn't take his drug and afterward he get with transgressors. He is tracked down and must be killed as every transgressor but he is going to fight to kill the leader and so the feelings come back in the society.
2. Preston, main character, have not feeling thanks at his drug. His face fa hasn't expression: he doesn't smile, doesn't cry... But then, when he transgress his feelings reappear on the face. People who are under the same influence have too nobody feelings.
On the other hand those who break are obliged to hide to express them.
3.the title " Equilibrium " means the equilibre of the society. Indeed, when the men are all drug-addicts the society is totally stable, she lives in harmony and is controlled by a spiritual leader. It aims at stopping the wars, the destructions of mans.
4.The society want all mans haven't feeling because the men live in totally harmony, in peace. But they want a world without war. But some transgress, Preston and his team hunt and kill them: what drive in spite of them war!
I do not want to live in such a society because to haven’t feelings: it is to be inhuman: there are no feelings, no enjoyment, no punishment... All the individuals are indifferent some to the others: more shared love, more happiness... I’m not agree with a philosophy : people have no reason for living. The men are manipulated, their behaviours are as robots. In really, that is a danger!
Thank you J
Réponse: My compositon of 'Equilibrium' de laure95, postée le 19-12-2008 à 14:25:18 (S | E)
Bonjour, voici ce que tu dois corriger:
The movie is a fiction science (inverse les 2 mots).
In the street of Libria, feelings don't exist any more, they are erased by a drug: Proxium. This drug anti-anxiety returns the happier ? men. So means ? have accepted to put aside their freedom to live in accordance with the spiritual leader: "the father".John Preston is the main character, he works for "the father" and hunt (3è personne du singulier!) all those who transgress. One day, Preston doesn't take his drug and afterward he get (même remarque) with transgressors. He is tracked down and must be killed as every transgressor but he is going to fight
2. Preston, the main character, have not feeling thanks
On the other hand those who break are obliged to hide to express them.
3.the title " Equilibrium " means the equilibre of the society. Indeed, when the men are all drug-addicts the society is totally stable, she ? lives in harmony and is controlled by a spiritual leader. It aims at stopping the wars, the destructions of mans.
4.The society want (conjugaison!) all mans haven't feeling because the men live in totally harmony, in peace. But they want a world without war. But some transgress, Preston and his team hunt and kill them: what drive ? in spite of them war!
I do not want (wouldn't like) to live in such a society because to haven’t feelings: it is to be inhuman: there are no feelings, no enjoyment, no punishment... All the individuals are indifferent
