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Message de ptiitel0u posté le 01-04-2009 à 19:43:42 (S | E | F)
Bonsoir, j'ai un devoir à faire et voici la consigne :
Un des tes amis ou un membre de ta famille t'écrit une lettre parce que tu ne lui as pas donné de nouvelles depuis un certain temps. Utilise le present perfect et le preterit.
Alors j'ai fait ça et j'ai essayé de corriger le plus de fautes possibles donc si vous en voyez j'aimerais bien que vous me le signaliez
My dear Evy,
I haven't had a letter from you since you decided to immigrate to the usa. You promised me to write me regularly. About your new life in the usa, What have you been doing ? What have you been visiting ? At home, life is beautiful and everything went well. Kelly, our little sister, found a boyfriend 8 months ago and she have worked as a lawyer for two years. Mum and Dad have decided to renovate the house, I hope you will love.
That's all I can tell you for the time being
Your brother
Bryan
Merci beaucoup pour votre aide
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Modifié par bridg le 01-04-2009 19:44
Message de ptiitel0u posté le 01-04-2009 à 19:43:42 (S | E | F)
Bonsoir, j'ai un devoir à faire et voici la consigne :
Un des tes amis ou un membre de ta famille t'écrit une lettre parce que tu ne lui as pas donné de nouvelles depuis un certain temps. Utilise le present perfect et le preterit.
Alors j'ai fait ça et j'ai essayé de corriger le plus de fautes possibles donc si vous en voyez j'aimerais bien que vous me le signaliez
My dear Evy,
I haven't had a letter from you since you decided to immigrate to the usa. You promised me to write me regularly. About your new life in the usa, What have you been doing ? What have you been visiting ? At home, life is beautiful and everything went well. Kelly, our little sister, found a boyfriend 8 months ago and she have worked as a lawyer for two years. Mum and Dad have decided to renovate the house, I hope you will love.
That's all I can tell you for the time being
Your brother
Bryan
Merci beaucoup pour votre aide
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Modifié par bridg le 01-04-2009 19:44
Réponse: Correction de brettdallen, postée le 01-04-2009 à 22:09:50 (S | E)
Bonsoir,
Je vous propose un début de correction...
My dear Evy,
I haven't had a letter from you since you decided to immigrate to the usa(capital letters). You promised me to write(préposition?) me regularly. About your new life in the usa(un peu lourd!), What have you been doing(since you moved there?) ? What have you been visiting(le perfect simple est mieux approprié) ? At home, life is beautiful and everything went(mauvais choix de forme verbale) well. Kelly, our little sister, found a boyfriend 8 months ago and she have(3ème personne du singulier!) worked as a lawyer for two years. Mum and Dad have decided to renovate the house, I hope you will love(manque un complément, non?).
That's all I can tell you for the time being
Your brother
Bryan
L'ensemble est correct, en définitive.. vous êtes sur la bonne voie..
Cordialement.
Réponse: Correction de jean31, postée le 01-04-2009 à 22:10:14 (S | E)
Bonsoir,
My dear Evy,
I haven't had a letter from you since you decided to emigrate(me paraît plus logique) to the USA.(toujours en majuscules) You promised me to write to me regularly. About your new life in the USA,(encore ! ) What have you been doing? What have you been visiting? At home, life is beautiful and everything went well. Kelly, our little sister, found a boyfriend 8 months ago and she has(aïe, aë, aïe !) worked as a lawyer for two years. Mum and Dad have decided to renovate the house, I hope you will love it.
That's all I can tell you for the time being.
Your brother
Bryan
Bonne continuation.
Réponse: Correction de ptiitel0u, postée le 03-04-2009 à 19:25:05 (S | E)
Merci beaucoup pour votre aide.
