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Message de seiken78 posté le 10-06-2009 à 22:27:15 (S | E | F)
Voilà Bonjour.
j'aimerais bien me faire corriger, j'espere n'avoir pas trop fait de fautes ni d'incohérences.
Merci à vous.^^
About the Greenbaums father, he was a worker who joined a friendly society, thanks to the system f these ones which acts as a mutual, he got pensions in exchange of a quaterly member free. If he hadn't joined this kind of society he would have been rescued by the then parish or he would have to go in a workhouse.About the daughter who was ill too, she was accepted as a patient in one of the new nearby London hospital setup few years before, she was lucky to go there because the normal condition to be accepted is by a recommodation letter by a benefactor.Then she was moved in quarantine to a free hospital, Homerton which is specialized in infectious deseases.The whole treatment and the doctor at home was free for the Greenbaum family thanks to the National Insurance Act.
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Modifié par bridg le 10-06-2009 23:07
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Message de seiken78 posté le 10-06-2009 à 22:27:15 (S | E | F)
j'aimerais bien me faire corriger, j'espere n'avoir pas trop fait de fautes ni d'incohérences.
Merci à vous.^^
About the Greenbaums father, he was a worker who joined a friendly society, thanks to the system f these ones which acts as a mutual, he got pensions in exchange of a quaterly member free. If he hadn't joined this kind of society he would have been rescued by the then parish or he would have to go in a workhouse.About the daughter who was ill too, she was accepted as a patient in one of the new nearby London hospital setup few years before, she was lucky to go there because the normal condition to be accepted is by a recommodation letter by a benefactor.Then she was moved in quarantine to a free hospital, Homerton which is specialized in infectious deseases.The whole treatment and the doctor at home was free for the Greenbaum family thanks to the National Insurance Act.
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Modifié par bridg le 10-06-2009 23:07
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Réponse: Correction /Greenbaums de laure95, postée le 13-06-2009 à 11:58:26 (S | E)
Bonjour, voici ce que tu dois corriger:
About the Greenbaums father, he was a worker who joined a friendly society, thanks to the system f these ones which acts as a mutual
, he got pensions in exchange of a quaterly member free. If he hadn't joined this kind of society he would have been rescued by the then parish or he would have had to go in a workhouse.About the daughter who was ill too, she was accepted as a patient in one of the new nearby London hospital setup (en 2 mots) few years before, she was lucky to go there because the normal condition to be accepted is by a recommodation letter by a benefactor (à reformuler de manière plus courte).Then she was moved (put) in quarantine to (in) a free hospital, Homerton which is specialized in infectious deseases.The whole treatment and the doctor at home was (conjugaison!) free for the Greenbaum family thanks to the National Insurance Act.
