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Message de imane_16 posté le 27-03-2011 à 20:07:14 (S | E | F)
Bonjour,
j'ai essayé de faire un texte descriptif en anglais, et je voudrais que quelqu'un le corrige s'il vous plaît :
Salim, my best friend, is really a genius,when his parents bought him a computer, he easily adapted to use it, and after a small period, he managed to hack sites, steal informations from other computer, he oslo can know all paswords of email of his firends and family, as a result, everybody warns of him,but the worst is that he didn't get a good markes at school because he still for hours in front of his computer searching for any new way to steal informations.physically, he has a oval face,tall and very strong guy,his hair is black and he always wear a carefully elected clothes.he always tell me that life is very short, so we should thin k carefully before doing anything and never alllow others to choose our personal decisions,all those who know him,including me, beleif that Salim can be a miracle in the futur.
MERCI D'AVANCE Merci d'avance.
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Modifié par imane_16 le 27-03-2011 20:08
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Modifié par lucile83 le 27-03-2011 20:47
Message de imane_16 posté le 27-03-2011 à 20:07:14 (S | E | F)
Bonjour,
j'ai essayé de faire un texte descriptif en anglais, et je voudrais que quelqu'un le corrige s'il vous plaît :
Salim, my best friend, is really a genius,when his parents bought him a computer, he easily adapted to use it, and after a small period, he managed to hack sites, steal informations from other computer, he oslo can know all paswords of email of his firends and family, as a result, everybody warns of him,but the worst is that he didn't get a good markes at school because he still for hours in front of his computer searching for any new way to steal informations.physically, he has a oval face,tall and very strong guy,his hair is black and he always wear a carefully elected clothes.he always tell me that life is very short, so we should thin k carefully before doing anything and never alllow others to choose our personal decisions,all those who know him,including me, beleif that Salim can be a miracle in the futur.
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Modifié par imane_16 le 27-03-2011 20:08
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Modifié par lucile83 le 27-03-2011 20:47
Réponse: Correction/descriptive text de notrepere, postée le 28-03-2011 à 05:18:32 (S | E)
HelloSalim, my best friend, is really a genius, [point] When his parents bought him a computer, he easily adapted to use (1) it, and after a small period, he managed to hack sites, steal informations from other computers, [point] He oslo (2) can know (3) all paswords (2)
(1) forme +ing
(2) orthographe
(3) autre verbe
(4) A mettre avant le nom
(5) au présent
(6) il faut un verbe
(7) verbe manquant
(8) accorde
(9) il ne va pas; decisions are "made" or "taken" Lien Internet
Réponse: Correction/descriptive text de imane_16, postée le 28-03-2011 à 17:58:02 (S | E)
ça m'a baeucoup aidé..je vous remerci bien
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