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Message de bobii971 posté le 12-09-2009 à 22:12:42 (S | E | F)
Bonsoir...
J'aurai besoin d'une correction pour ma rédaction merci...
This document is photograph from a film poster.The film is entitled "The Namesake" and his tag line is "two worlds, one journey".In the bottom right of film poster, we can see that this movie received four Oscars from Toronto, London, Telluride and Rome.However, nowhere there is written actor's name and director's name.
The Focal point of this film poster is a man who is walking.According to the synopsis, he have American Identity but he is of Indian origin.He is a student who is called Gogol.
Gogol is wearing a black jacket, a black trousers and he is caring a purse on his left shoulder. He is looking anxious and lost and to have in twenties.
The scene takes place in 2 cities
According to the synopsis, it is let bet New York or let be Calcutta.
In the right city, we can see more traffic lights and many building than in the left city.So, the city
on the right is New York and on the left it is Calcutta.In the background, there are 2 characters: a Indian woman and a Indian man.The woman rests with her head on the man shoulder. They may have been his parents or somebody close (quelqu'un de proche)or people who play a role very important in this movie.
Thanks you
(Ps: Si il ya a des fautes de temps,pourriez-vous me les expliquer s'il vous plait? Merci)
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Modifié par bridg le 12-09-2009 22:53
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Message de bobii971 posté le 12-09-2009 à 22:12:42 (S | E | F)
Bonsoir...
J'aurai besoin d'une correction pour ma rédaction merci...
This document is photograph from a film poster.The film is entitled "The Namesake" and his tag line is "two worlds, one journey".In the bottom right of film poster, we can see that this movie received four Oscars from Toronto, London, Telluride and Rome.However, nowhere there is written actor's name and director's name.
The Focal point of this film poster is a man who is walking.According to the synopsis, he have American Identity but he is of Indian origin.He is a student who is called Gogol.
Gogol is wearing a black jacket, a black trousers and he is caring a purse on his left shoulder. He is looking anxious and lost and to have in twenties.
The scene takes place in 2 cities
According to the synopsis, it is let bet New York or let be Calcutta.
In the right city, we can see more traffic lights and many building than in the left city.So, the city
on the right is New York and on the left it is Calcutta.In the background, there are 2 characters: a Indian woman and a Indian man.The woman rests with her head on the man shoulder. They may have been his parents or somebody close (quelqu'un de proche)or people who play a role very important in this movie.
Thanks you
(Ps: Si il ya a des fautes de temps,pourriez-vous me les expliquer s'il vous plait? Merci)
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Modifié par bridg le 12-09-2009 22:53
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Réponse: The Namesake/ correction de robertbrou, postée le 15-09-2009 à 17:36:20 (S | E)
Bonjour,
Voici mes corrections/suggestions de votre travail.
NB: Assurer-vous de mettre une espace après les points.
This document is photograph from a film poster.The film is entitled "The Namesake" and his tag line is "Two Worlds, One Journey" (à moins que ce soit écrit aux miniscules sur le poster).In the bottom right of film poster, we can see that this movie received four Oscars (use 'awards') from Toronto, London, Telluride and Rome.However, nowhere there is (ordre) written (manque article) actor's
The Focal point of this film poster is a man who is walking.According to the synopsis, he have (temps) American identity but he is of Indian origin.He is a student who is called Gogol.
Gogol is wearing a black jacket,
The scene takes place in 2 cities
According to the synopsis, it is let bet New York or let be Calcutta. (Utiliser le conditionnel)
In the right city, we can see more traffic lights and many buildings than in the left city.So, the city
on the right is New York and on the left it is Calcutta.In the background, there are 2 characters: a Indian woman and a (rappeler là règle pour l'article indéfini devant une voyelle) Indian man.The woman rests with (Besoin de votre précision en français -- cela pourrait être 'stands with' ou 'rests') her head on the man shoulder. They may have been his parents or somebody close to him (quelqu'un de proche)or people who play a role very important (placement) in this movie.
Hope this helps!
robertbrou
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